Dragon Princess – Chapter 67

So we all know the reputation wuxias have for repetitive plots.
Been thinking about it a bit recently, and I think I’ve located the problem in their writing that causes this – a failed attempt at a chiastic structure. For those of you who don’t know chiastic (or “ring”) structure is an ancient and somewhat cyclical structure reminiscent of poetry used everywhere from the texts of the Abrahamic faiths, the Odyssey, the Illiad, and even the Hobbit (to name a few). It follows a pattern of callbacks, or even repeated events to draw the reader into the story. It is easy to see the attempt at this wuxia authors make, but issues arise with how frequently the inner cycles are executed without real progress being made for the main character – that is, the inner cycles that are being repeated serve no or limited narrative purpose that is never rewarded to the audience.

Imagine and MC that constantly goes to a new place, offends some young master, gets challenged by that young master, then kills the young master, then repeat (who am I kidding, you’ve probably read that plot so just remember, don’t imagine 😊). This structure doesn’t inherently make for a bad story, but it’s missing a few things that make it easy to tire of. The MC does not make any progress from this encounter – no treasure gained, no enemy made (as would be the case in a truer chiastic), no lesson learned. The MC has not gone anywhere for his troubles, he is exactly where he started – just with new paint. He doesn’t even remember the encounter. This is by far the biggest issue with the writing – a betrayal of the reader, a broken promise.

Adding some meaning to each of the encounters would allow readers to be drawn into the story. Well, there’s some other issues and fixes that could be done – but there’s a chap for you to read, so bye!

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kawaii1234567
kawaii1234567
February 27, 2020 2:10 am

I had been thinking a little about this idea since the last post and it seems like it’s a general trope in Asian web/light novels in general not just the fighting/cultivation novels, where you have a similar/ recurring obstacle that the MC never actually deals with and always locks the characters character in a default condition. Fighting novels, fighting the obnoxious (young master/villainous gambler/ yakuza what have you) Heroic quest novels (farming / grind) that really doesn’t do much of anything except give you a chance too look at the loot and reinforce the idea that the hero “IS GETTING… Read more »

kawaii1234567
kawaii1234567
February 27, 2020 2:12 am
Reply to  kawaii1234567

Man I wish I could edit these to correct my poor use of homonyms, homophones, and homographs.

Silva
February 27, 2020 2:15 am
Reply to  kawaii1234567

I’m pretty sure there’s a big fat edit button right below the comment though, does it not work for you?

kawaii1234567
kawaii1234567
February 27, 2020 9:06 am
Reply to  Silva

I don’t see it at all. That’s using email + name on a desktop, WP account on a desktop, and email + name on tablet.

kawaii1234567
kawaii1234567
February 29, 2020 9:31 am

Do you remember the television series Kung Fu ? Starred David Carradine back in the 70s. It’s a similar concept, you have a chinese/american kung fu master wander around the old west. There was the nominal McGuffin of him searching for family (father/brother I forget, and it really was unimportant anyway). The show was actually about him going to a town every week and getting into the same fight (give or take) as last week and then moving on. You would also get recollections of his life as a monk in China. Point being, if you have a genre that’s… Read more »